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"Dear sister,

Your words are like honey poisoned with wormwood - sweet to the ear, but bitter in the end. I'd smite thee in thy breast were it that you had a heart; you may raise the sun but your veins are full of ice, you may be a goddess but you are more like a devil, your coat may be white but inside you are as black as sin. This prison you have sent me to may be dark and cold... but not as dark or as cold as you.

~Princess Luna"
I was thinking to myself what would be going through my mind if I was imprisoned by my own sister, this is what I came up with.
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Dravencleary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Why is this in the "sad attempt( it's got an A in it lol) at writing folder"?
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Jrakob Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
because I can't spell so save my life. I also lack basic understanding of how to write properly, like how to write paragraphs or when to put a period or when not to use a comma and lots of other basic knowledge for writing that most other people seem to know.
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Dravencleary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Heh same here. I'm glad I have English next semester so that I'll be able to spot those pesky mistake and do better and such .
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Jrakob Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
if I want to write a fan-fic or something I just hire a editor.
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Dravencleary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Like someone you know or do people do that for other peope on da? Iv seen otter comments about it
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Jrakob Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
well right at the moment I'm thinking of the time I actually paid someone some DA points to do it.
well more like I bagged them until they did and than felt bad so gave them a four month full subscription.
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Dravencleary Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow lol well if you ever need another I think between the two of us we could work through any mistakes oh and i work for Free.
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tdlob Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011
That's great, more Celestian loyalists should take a look at this.
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Jrakob Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
yus spread the propaganda. "FOR THE REPUBLIC!"
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tdlob Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011
We must restore Luna to her rightful place as the ruler of equestira!

Luna, true heir to the throne!

DIU VIVERE LUNAE!
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